Friday, April 4, 2014
Impressionism- The Doctors office
It was a very cold day! The sky was dark with slight clouds. The parking lot was vacant, and all you could hear was the cars driving pass, and the obnoxious ambulance pushing it's way through the traffic. I hobbled slowly into the doors, and I noticed that it was empty. Ha! Free of crying babies, yelling parents, and crazy kids. As I walked to the desk, I was greeted by a woman who asked had I ever been here before, and I answered "No". She ordered me to fill out paper work, and to leave my insurance card, and I.D. I waited patiently, and finally was called. I was sent to room number two. The room seemed to be very chilly, so chilly the hairs on my milky brown skin stood up. There was nothing in this room but, a stool, chair, supplies, and a patient bed. I sat in the chair, got my blood pressure taken, and was asked many questions. Then I changed into my gown, and waited for the doctor. I hear a very quite sort of knock, and in walks the doctor. She was kind of pale white with brown freckles, and all I could seem to focus on was her very slender body shape under her white doctors cover up, and the blonde hair that stood up on her head. She was very friendly, but her personality was very dull, and boring. Maybe I was expecting a little more then what was suppose to be given. After I got my diagnosis, she sent me on my way. What a visit! The doctors office was the last place I wanted to be....
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Kierra, I could see from your description that you were under the impression of being separated and feeling isolated in the doctor's office. It seemed to be a very alien place where you weren't sure of what was going to happen. Further into your impressions, you were happy not to be stressed by the noise of parents and wailing kids so you didn't become more tense than you already were. This way you had some peace and quiet with your own thoughts. Your thoughts about the setting and your doctor weren't really reflective or emotive, but it seemed like you wanted to take your focus off any feelings you had about your appointment or anything else. This can be seen by your imagery being to the point. "a stool, chair, supplies, and a patient bed." You may also have wanted to focus your attention on something so you weren't too bored while waiting for your doctor.
ReplyDeleteI also noticed the difference in the description of yourself " milky brown skin" compared to the lengthier one of the doctor, "pale skin with brown freckles", "slender body", and "blonde hair". I could see again that you felt removed/separated because of the differences between you and your doctor. I am curious as to why you spent more time talking about her physical appearance than you did your own.
Lastly I saw that you were under the impression that your doctor would entertain you perhaps to take your mind off of being nervous about the appointment. You also may have thought that she would break the ice between you two since you didn't know her. "Maybe I was expecting more than what was given". So you ended up being disappointed when nothing came of your meeting socially.
A possible message from your post is that going to the doctor's office isn't always a negative experience. There was no specific intent in your story and all of your description remained subjective, like John Dowell. It was a good example of an impressionistic writing. Hope all goes well with your health.
I love the direct focus of your piece. You are going through here and it makes me as a reader seem to feel it with you. The imagery of the doctor was very interesting, her shape in her coat, her hair and her personality...it was giving your impression of her, and you can see that through this post. As a reader, here I see that the character, you, are nervous and that you want to be distracted or somewhere else. I enjoyed this post. (I hope you are okay btw!)
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