Wednesday, February 19, 2014

Rewrite

Volume One Chapter 7: (Pg. 56 – 57)
Anne and Captain Wentworth cross paths for the first time in eight years, and both of them are experiencing different emotions about what happened in the past.

 Standing in the presence of Anne, Captain Wentworth is lost in emotions and is feeling a sense of emptiness. Anne noticed the emptiness in his eyes as they glanced at one another, and wondered how eight long years changed his feelings for her. The room felt cold to him as thoughts of the past reoccurred. Angered by the past he had no feeling of happiness towards her.
Mr. Wentworth is very bothered by this unexpected meeting, which lead him to confide in Henrietta. He angrily expresses the bitter feelings he has, and tells her he no longer desires to know Anne. Henrietta listens quietly as he goes on, “How uneasy to discuss such feelings of loneliness and pain” says Wentworth.
As he goes on Henrietta wonders if Anne is aware of his feelings towards her, and delivers the message to Mary. When Mary tells Anne she is in disbelief, but acknowledges her wrong doing. 
Wentworth was very aware of his attachment to Anne, but had no desire in knowing her again. It was time for him to find a woman he could marry, and share his riches with.


1 comment:

  1. Kierra--Your re-write actually takes us into the feelings and perspectives of multiple characters. You point out that Anne "noticed the emptiness in [Wentworth's] eyes," that Wentworth was displeased with unexpectedly seeing Anne, and that "Henrietta wonders if Anne is aware." So you actually go in between these three characters' focal points in this passage. Usually, free indirect discourse will stick with one particular characters' perspective for a time, but such switching is not unheard of (especially in more experimental works). But Austen's version of free indirect discourse, while it does switch between perspectives, does so less quickly and frequently.

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